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Think of this as an experiment. To try to make the viewer FEEL the musical notes.
It needs some stray lines coming from the instruments. Distortion of the picture. The louder it's supposed to be, the more distorted and crazy the images should be.

To the colorist: Try to remember color theory when working with moods. Every panel's colors does not have to match up, MOOD IS THE MOST IMPORTANT THING. Just a thought, but a more painted style would benefi

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- by Dominik Jaworski

Dear artists. Before you start reading the info of what to put on the page, I thought I'd explain my intentions, so that interpreting the script will be slightly easier.

The overall concept of the story is to comment on (or state the observation of) the circular nature of life, how there seems to be a certain pattern that repeats itself over and over, even if the actors and the scenery changes. The current financial crisis, is one of the examples of such repeating of past events, but I bet you can find events even more fitting.
Due to this, there should be certain prevalence of round elements through

UnmentionablesUnmentionables

by

David Kirlin

PAGE ONE (four panels)

Panel 1 (small): Close in of blood running off the edge of a sidewalk.

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Panel 3: ALLEN is laying on the sidewalk, the blood coming out of the back of his head. He looks as if he fell off his bicycle. He is alive and stirring.

Panel 4 (black & white): LUNA is heading out the door, yelling behind her. ALLEN stands beside

stronger than steel part 5[later that day] so what should we do now. (dustin)
well we need only one thing if we want to do this right. (justin)
whats that superpowers. (chris)
yes that but the most important thing is that we have teamwork
without we'll be dead in no time. (justin)
why do we need to work together I means as far as I can tell we have all we need
street smarts, [points to justin]
strategic mind, [nods to dustin]
and muscles. [slams fist to chest]
thats all a team should really need right (ryan)
hey what about me! (chris)
what all you can do is jump high thats not even much of a power I bet anyone of us could do it with some training (ryan)

stronger than steel part 4you think were superheroes (ryan) not superheroes just superpowers (justin) exclaimed powers whats your super insanity (dustin) laughed no didn't you see how everyone was acting after I finished batting (justin) yeah you got ticked threw the bat and stormed off like every other time you bat (ryan) I'm going to forget that until I completely figure out my fire powers then I going to roast you (ryan) fire powers you got this figured out already whats my power (dustin) judging by the fact that its raining /places hand on shoulder/ and your not wet I would say water powers (justin) whats mine super strength (ryan) seems like it (justin) / ryan ju

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Contests / 2008 / Comics Team / Writers

my second entry into the Da writers contest. I wanted to redo and old story i did for my character Cat Scratch. [link]

Link to the contest. [link]

This is sort of a wip cause I might change the pages cause it looks like it's too big for 2 pages.

any help is appreciated.

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!thetifftiff Sep 28, 2008

I like it so far, I can definitely picture it the way you describe everything.

I'm not good at critiquing writing aside from the fact I noticed a few typos, all on page 2: dialogue of panel 1, description of panel 2... and I thought I found another one but I can't find it again.

~PSOWILL Sep 28, 2008

D: I think I got them all but if I missed a few let me know.

!thetifftiff Sep 28, 2008

I did find another one. In the first panel of the first page you wrote 'where' instead of were.

Also the S in Scratch should be captialized in the first panel of the second page and the word should have an apostrophe and an s since they're her fingers. Actually you have the s lower case in there a few times when it should be capital.

And reading through it again I noticed a grammatical error, you didn't keep the tense in your description of the third panel of the first page, it should either be 'turns around and sees' or 'turned around and saw'.

~PSOWILL Sep 29, 2008

ok fixed.

anymore.

!thetifftiff Sep 29, 2008

Other than the fact you put the same typo back in panel one of page two, no.

~PSOWILL Sep 29, 2008

whoops

!thetifftiff Sep 29, 2008

At least you fixed everything else.

~PSOWILL Sep 29, 2008

how about now?

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~fear-is-spreading Sep 26, 2008 Professional General Artist

It kept my interest, which is a compliment in and of itself, but it does seem a bit too long. You're having to put too many details in your dialogue to make the two pages work with back and future story.
Good premise and interesting take though!
I do see one thing wrong with your script.
Page 2, panels 4 and 5 seem to actually be the same panel, and you just had some formatting issues. Cause you put the dialogue from panel 4 in the description area of panel 5. Just a simple celtx typo... I like rereading mine in typesetting mode twice before I even export it as a PDF.

Good job with uploading another one... keep them coming, cause for some reason, I just can't fucking stop myself from uploading more, myself.

-Aaron

~PSOWILL Sep 27, 2008

thanks. I edited this one to be shorter.

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